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Snow Day Story

January 16, 2013 | Posted in: Learning Resources

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Last week, you did some stellar work with figurative language, and you practiced it by continuing two stories that I gave you.  (Remember the Grammys story and the safari story?)  Today, I have another similar activity for you.  Here is your first paragraph:

My eyes slowly opened, and I glanced at my shining alarm clock.  “Oh no…” I groaned, realizing that I’d overslept. I squeezed my eyes shut, hoping to avoid the busy morning that I now faced.  Finally, I opened my eyes again, just a little bit, and I noticed that my room looked strange.  The light coming into my bedroom was strange.  It was the wrong color.  Too bright, for this time of day.  It almost was like the light was shining down from the morning  sun, but also shining up from the lawn.  Then it hit me: Only one thing could make that happen.  SNOW!  Cold, white, wonderful snow!  Snow as fluffy as a soft, down pillow.  I rocketed out of bed and opened the window.  It was a true winter wonderland outside, and as I admired the glistening view, I almost missed the note taped to my window.  It said:

No school today!  Happy snow day!  I didn’t want to wake you.  Take your time, and come downstairs for your favorite breakfast when you are ready!  XOXO

Continue the story.  Here are a few things for you to keep in mind as you get ready to write:

  • Don’t just start typing.  Take a few moments to PLAN your story.  What will happen?  Will you have a problem and solution?  Who will your main characters be?
  • Be sure to include some vivid description using the SEVEN senses.  This helps the reader to visualize the story happening.
  • How can figurative language help your story?  Will a simile or metaphor grab the reader?  Will hyperbole or onomatopoeia or personification capture attention and interest?  Maybe alliteration will allure your awesome audience!

This is, of course, optional.  But hopefully you will give it a try.  You can write one more paragraph to extend the story I started, or finish the entire story.  It’s up to you, friends!  But you must continue from where I left off.  (Don’t continue someone else’s story.)  Remember, by posting your story here, you are inviting your classmates to comment on your story.  Kids, remember to avoid using ANY real names (in your story or in your comments) and keep the comments kind and helpful.

Email me (or use the contact page) if you forget how to log in!  Have fun!

15 Comments

  1. 1213-4
    January 16, 2013

    Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm… my favorite breakfast…BINGO! It’s bacon,bread,butter on bagels, and blueberries! I dashed downstairs like an angry cheetah trying to catch his gazelle for lunch. When I saw the food, my mouth watered. I felt like I can a whole entire buffet! I dived in. Crash! The wind roared and broke the window!I was really in a pickle!

    • jonmoss
      January 16, 2013

      I like your word-choice (dashed) and your really creative simile! Excellent hyperbole too! Well done!

      • 1213-4
        January 16, 2013

        Thanks a lot! Still,nobody is this since it’s optional. 🙁 🙁 🙁

        • jonmoss
          January 16, 2013

          It’s a snowday, and I know folks are playing or relaxing. It’s ok. 🙂

  2. 1213-3
    January 16, 2013

    I rushed down the stairs like a jet,My feet bearly touching. I saw a chocolate fountain,cinnamon buns, and hot chocolate. “ULLLLLP” I chugged down the co-co. I took the biggest bun,dipped it in the chocolate fountain and took a monter-sized bite out of it. I called over my friend Luke and we went to the giant hill on the end of my street. We went down on my super speedor sled. but we hit something. we bumped over it and when we looked at what it was luke said it’s “amazing”” you ain’t just wistiling dixie”

    • jonmoss
      January 16, 2013

      I love your first sentence!!! You have also made me very hungry. I may need to find a chocolate fountain. I wonder if Big Y has one for me… 😉 Great figurative language!

    • 1213-11
      January 16, 2013

      You said a name

      • 1213-3
        January 16, 2013

        I know #11, I realized that right after I posted it! SORRY!

  3. 1213-6
    January 16, 2013

    I was falling over myself as I raced into the kichen and there it was…eggs and a smoked salmon bagel. Something I would like to try some day.

  4. 1213-19
    January 16, 2013

    I got downstairs and ate two waffles and then read then started to play
    video games. PS my cat went crazy. GOOOOOD BYYYYYYYYYYE!!!!!!!!!!!:)

  5. 1213-11
    January 16, 2013

    I raced down the stairs watching everyone eat breakfast I gobbled it down my throat and ran to find my snow gear once I found it I put it on as quick as a bunny then I made such a big snowman that it was a world record I was so tired that I slept the rest of the day the next day I was ready for school!

  6. 1213-12
    January 16, 2013

    I zoomed out of bed and got into my snowsuit as fast as a cheetah (I skipped breakfast). All I could see was fluffy white cotton candy.I was so happy. I made a snow fort that was detailed enough to live in.I tried to ask mom if I could sleep in there for a night, but that did not work at all.I wanted to make today the best day ever, so I tried digging to China.Mom would not let me do that either.I was aloud to play with my friend`s dog.When I went to bed I was glad I was going back to school tomorrow.

  7. 1213-16
    January 16, 2013

    I bolted down the stairs like the speed of lightning to see a stack of pancakes as high as the empire state building.I stuffed it in my mouth in one gulp and while I was getting ready I noticed all you could see was white.I opened the door… THUMP!!!!!!!I was blinded by stampede of fluffy snow taller than the door.

  8. 1213-17
    January 16, 2013

    Mr. Moss quickly ran down the stairs like a salt fish swimming at 68 mph in the ocean. He tripped falling face down into the kitchen. Then he bounded up as quick as a rabbit. When Mr Moss sat down in the kitchen chair, the only words he could make out were bah bah bah, like Mr. Krupp from captain underpants. This happened because’ he was so excited to eat his favorite breakfast . He whiffed up the smell of the crackling bacon. When he saw his favorite breakfast of a stack of pancakes with maple syrup his eyes nearly popped out of their sockets.

  9. 1213-1
    January 19, 2013

    Zing!!!I went downstairs so fast nobody saw me.When I was downstairs my eyes popped out and my mouth was so watery like the ocean.
    this is my breakfast:bacon,butter,eggs,choc.muffin,a waffle,bread,OJ(orange juice),and last but not least…ice cream!!I gobbled all
    of it. Bbuuuuurrrrrrrrppppppppp!!!!!!! Excuse me(I burped).In a split second I was upstairs.I zig-zagged to get my snow stuff.

    Then I played in the snow.

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